graceless prose

. . . a Kennewick Washington based [organization] based in Southeastern Washington.

Not only did someone write that, an accountant and a lawyer probably looked it over before it went public, and no one thought to rephrase it

. . . an [organization] based in Kennewick, in Southeastern Washington.

How hard can it be?

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Maybe I ought to have a subcategory for turns of phrase that make me itch; what should I call it?

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3 Responses to graceless prose

  1. blues eyes says:

    something in latin appended with “itis”?

  2. Anton says:

    Hm, scabies verbigenita (itch caused by words)?

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